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the pie chart below show the spending of a school in the UK from 1981 to 2001

The graph provides the consumption of schools in the United Kingdom during the
period
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 1981 to 2000, measured by percentage.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that the percentage of teachers'
salaries
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 was the greatest over the given
period
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,
while
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 insurance was the lowest for most of the
period
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. Focusing on the details, teachers'
salaries
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 were the highest throughout the
period
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, which were percentages of 40%, 50%, and 45% of total
school
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 spending,
while
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 other workers'
salaries
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 were the second most common in total
school
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 spending.
However
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, insurance and equipment were similar in funding in 1991, which were 3% and 5%, respectively. The resources increased slightly from 1981 at 15% to 1991 at 20 per cent of
school
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 spending, followed by a significant decrease, ending at 9 per cent of the
school
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 budget in the UK.
In addition
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, teachers'
salaries
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 were much higher than insurance. than in 2001 at 45% and about 8% of percentages, respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period, salaries, school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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