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You stayed with your friend and by mistake carried home one of his objects. Write a letter and explain: - How you enjoyed staying with your friend. - Explain the object which you brought with you by mistake and explain how the mistake happened. - Mention how you plan to return the object.

Dear Tim, How are you? Yesterday was so much fun. I enjoyed staying at your home and watching a movie together. I
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 want to tell you that your mom is very sweet. Do let her know that the pasta she made for me was very delicious, and I would love to try it again next time. I'm writing
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 that I have your power bank, which I by mistake carried home. Remember, you gave it to me when my phone was about to go dead? Thank you for letting me charge my
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 as I wanted to inform my mother about my whereabouts. I'm so sorry that I forgot to return it when I left. I know you carry your power bank
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 you when you go to your job. But do not worry, I'll return it to you on my way to the Gym tomorrow morning.
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, I would love to have some coffee with you. See you tomorrow. anum

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts of the task. To get a higher score, add a bit more detail about the object and the return plan.
task response
Task response: Your tone is warm and friendly, which fits a letter to a friend. Keep this tone all through the letter.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your ideas are easy to follow from start to end. Try to group one main idea in each paragraph more clearly.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: You use simple link words well. You can add a few more clear links like 'first', 'then', or 'so' when needed.
task response
Task response: You clearly say that you enjoyed your stay, name the object, explain the mistake, and say how you will return it.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear opening, body, and ending, so it is easy to read.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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