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Writing Samples
Band 5

You have just spent a weekend at a friend's house. When you returned home, you discovered that you had left a coat there. There are some important belongings in the pockets. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter * explain that you have left the coat there * say what the coat looks like, where you think you left it and what was in the pockets * make some suggestions about how to get all of your belongings back You should You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Pat,

Dear Pat, My pal!
Last
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 weekend was great staying at your house
and
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, and
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 thank you so much for inviting me. Well, I am writing
this
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 letter to let you know that during my stay at your house, I have forgotten my jacket somewhere there.  During
party
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the party
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, when
delivery
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the delivery
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 boy came to deliver pizza, I went outside in
hurry
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a hurry
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 to pay him
and
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, and
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If
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if
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 my memory serves me well, I put it on
couch
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the couch
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 before leaving. After that, I didn't remember to put it on because I was so busy eating and talking with everyone.  I am going to tell you some details about my jackets so it will
easy
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be easy
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 for you to find. It's a leather jacket in my favourite
colour
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colour,
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 black.
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, it's almost
knee length long
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knee-length
 and have white colour strip in
back
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the back
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.  Actually, I really need
this
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 jacket back because my wallet is
also
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 in there with my login card in it, which is necessary at my workplace
and
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 I can't work without it. I need it before my work starts next week. 
Therefore
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, if you are free tomorrow, can you please go to your nearby Canada
post
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Post
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 office and ship my coat with my belongings
at
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to
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 my home address
.
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?
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 I will be really thankful to you for your help. Sorry to bother you
my
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, my
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freind
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friend
! Your friend, Babal

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts, but add more clear detail about what else was in the pockets.
task response
Task response: Use the same word for coat or jacket, not both, to make your meaning clear.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your ideas are in a good order, but some links are weak. Use simple words like first, then, and so.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Check each sentence for small grammar mistakes, because they make the message less clear.
task response
Task response: You explain the problem, describe the coat, and give a way to send it back.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear opening, body, and ending.
The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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