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Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map illustrates the evolution of Chorleywood village development during the construction in 1868 and 1994. In general, it is noticeable that the rural
area
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 experiences an expansion and urbanisation, with the notable features
are
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being
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 the development of a housing
area
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, motorway, and railway. Between 1868 and 1922, there was
an south
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a southward
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 expansion of two residential zones alongside the westward artery, until a railway was constructed in 1909, crossing the housing
area
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 and running from the
westward
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west
 to the
eastward
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east
. In the same period, a park and a golf course were
also
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 paved in the middle of the countryside. In terms of the 1922-1994 period, a significant urbanisation was the development of
southern
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the southern
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 housing estate, parallel to the railway.
Moreover
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, growth was
also
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showed
Wrong verb form
shown
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 in the eastern
area
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, where a motorway was built in 1970, and five residential estates
was
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were
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 constructed
on
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at
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 each intersection, representing
continuation
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the continuation
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 of
modernisation
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the modernisation
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 of
rural
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the rural
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area
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population growth
  • geographical features
  • 19th century
  • construction
  • public buildings
  • railways
  • infrastructure
  • economic activities
  • housing developments
  • commercial zones
  • environmental concerns
  • deforestation
  • traffic
  • urban sprawl
  • notable architecture
  • landmarks
  • urbanization
  • expansion
  • modernization
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