The graph below shows the percentage of urban/suburban and rural households in a European country that had acces between 1999 and 2004.

The bar chart illustrates the proportions of urban/suburban and rural households located in a European-based country with
internet
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access, between 1999 and 2004.
Overall
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, the number of
houses
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that acquired the global network , no matter of their location, saw a gradual growth over the years.
Although
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the percentages of residential units in the metropolis had exceeded those in the countryside throughout the given period. In 1999, only 10% of urban/suburban
houses
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had
internet
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access,
whereas
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less than 5% of rural homes had
this
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feature.
However
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, with the start of the new decade, the number of
houses
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in the city that have obtained an
internet
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connection has risen markedly to 30%.
In contrast
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, countryside households percentages were under 10%, and didn’t reach
this
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figure until 2001, and by that, the number of city households experienced another growth to 40%. In 2002, 50% of urban/suburban residential units were able to use the digital network,
in contrast
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to less than 20% of rural homes. But in the
last
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two years, there was a slight growth in percentages of civic
houses
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with
internet
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access , with a marginally above 50% in 2003, and around 55% in 2004. Meanwhile, considerably more than 20% of outer city
houses
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had a connection to the global network in 2003, and the numbers escalated to over 30% the following year.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words internet, houses with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban
  • rural
  • access
  • percent
  • year
  • from
  • to
  • in
  • and
  • but
  • rise
  • grow
  • increase
  • start
  • end
  • higher
  • lower
  • difference
  • gap
  • trend
  • pattern
  • more
  • less
  • than
  • 1999
  • 2004
  • data
  • graph
  • show
  • these
  • also
  • could
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