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Writing Samples
Band 3.5

Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is no denying that prevention of
climate
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 is crucial these
day
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.
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 it is a commonly held
beliefe
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belief
 that adapting to
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climate
change
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 and find solution to live with it is a must. There is
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 an argument that opposes it. In my
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 I believe that preventing
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climate
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 is important for the safety of
futur genration
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future generations
.
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 living with
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climate
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 is necessary these days.
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, governments and society should invest in adapting
climate
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chaange
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 programs to solve certain problems,
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 as building sea walls for the prevention from high sea levels.
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, farmers should make
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adjustments
 to their farms
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 to deal with some effects of
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. Another point to consider, preventing from climat
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 is important in the long term, because the cost of adapting
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climate
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 can be much
more
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higher than preventing it
,
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moreover
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, if governments
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 not take
actions
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, it can be
extreamly
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extremely
 dangerous, as bad weather
condtions
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conditions
 will be more frequent and severe. It is
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managing extreme weather
condtions
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conditions
 is harder and it can be costly,
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, governments
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should
 invest in clean energy, aslo protecting natural resources is crucial. In conclusion, despite people having different views i believe that both adapting and preventing
climate
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 with effective solutions are very important, as
climate
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 can cause severe weather
condtions
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conditions
 for coming genrations, it is
in
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our responsibility to
safe
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save
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 the environment from damage.

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Make your main view very clear from the start and keep the same view to the end.
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Answer all parts of the question more fully. Say how much you agree or disagree in a direct way.
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Add one or two clear real examples to support each main idea.
coherence and cohesion
Use topic sentences at the start of each body paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like because, so, but, and however.
coherence and cohesion
Do not put too many ideas in one sentence. Split long sentences into two.
coherence and cohesion
You have a clear intro, two body parts, and a conclusion.
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Your essay stays on the climate change topic all the way.
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You give some support, like sea walls, farms, and clean energy.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • prevent
  • adaptation
  • mitigation
  • cope with
  • effects
  • shift
  • mindset
  • lifestyle
  • balance
  • invest
  • research
  • technology
  • crucial
  • education
  • awareness
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