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City Population Changes The line graph below illustrates the changes in population of four cities from 2000 to 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. YearTokyo (M)Delhi (M)Shanghai (M)Sao Paulo (M) 200034.415.714.217.8 200535.618.017.518.8 201036.821.920.219.7 201537.425.723.721.1 202037.330.327.122.0 202536.933.829.222.6

The line graph illustrates
population
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 changes in four major cities—
Tokyo
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,
Delhi
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,
Shanghai
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, and Sao Paulo—from 2000 to 2025.
Overall
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,
Tokyo
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 remained the most populous city throughout the period,
although
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 its
growth
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 slowed and slightly declined toward the end.
In contrast
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,
Delhi
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 and
Shanghai
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 experienced rapid and continuous increases, with
Delhi
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 showing the most dramatic
growth
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. São Paulo
also
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 grew steadily but at a more moderate rate. In 2000,
Tokyo
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 had a
population
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 of 34.4
million
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, significantly higher than the other
cities
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. Its
population
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 rose gradually to a peak of 37.4
million
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 in 2015, before stabilising and
then
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 slightly declining to 36.9
million
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 by 2025. Meanwhile,
Delhi
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 saw a sharp rise from 15.7
million
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 in 2000 to 33.8
million
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 in 2025, more than doubling over the 25-year period and narrowing the gap with
Tokyo
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 considerably.
Shanghai
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also
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 recorded strong
growth
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, increasing from 14.2
million
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 to 29.2
million
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, maintaining its position as the third most populous city.
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, São Paulo’s
population
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 grew steadily from 17.8
million
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 to 22.6
million
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, though its increase was less pronounced compared to
Delhi
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 and
Shanghai
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. In summary,
while
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Tokyo
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 remained dominant, the most notable trend was the rapid expansion of
Delhi
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 and
Shanghai
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, highlighting a shift in
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growth
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 toward Asian megacities.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, delhi, shanghai, tokyo, growth, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapid" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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