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Band 3

You travelled by a long distance bus recently and your suitcase was damaged. Write a letter to the bus company. In your letter •Inform the bus company of when and to where you travelled •Describe your suitcase and what happened to it •Explain why the company should pay for a new suitcase

Dear Travalbus  Hello My name
Kann
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is Kann
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, the passenger
that
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who
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 had a service from you
organize, today
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. Today
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, I
sent
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am sending
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this
Linking Words
 letter to inform you
about
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that
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 my suitcase was
damagd
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damaged
 when was i had travelled with you
organize
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apply
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on the
trips
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trip
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 that recently
gone
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went
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 through Taiwan on
Monday
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Monday,
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 24
Decamber
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December
 2026. In case
i
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I
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 want your company
take
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to take
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a
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apply
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responsibility or refund for the problem that
come
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comes
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 from
you lacking
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your lack
 of service because the suicase had broken by you transpotation process that
make
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made
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 my personal dress, book and laptop fall
in to
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into
 stress until the bus ruin  There for The company must
paid
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pay for
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 a new suitcase for me,
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moreover
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moreover,
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 take an
accounntable
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accountable
 to refund my personal thing the i mention
and
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, and
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 you can
seen
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see
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 the picture that
i
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I
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 sent
togetter
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together
 in
this
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letter
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letter,
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 so
hope
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I hope
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 you will
get
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reach
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 a conclusion for me.

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Say the trip time and place in a clear way in the first part.
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Tell more about the suitcase, like size, color, and the broken part.
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Give a clear reason why the company should pay, for example it cannot be used now.
coherence and cohesion
Use one main idea in each part: trip, damage, and payment.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like and, but, so, because.
coherence and cohesion
Add a clear end line, like 'I look forward to your reply'.
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You said when you travelled and where the trip was.
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You asked the company to take responsibility and pay.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has two parts, so the reader can follow some ideas.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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