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Band 1

Nowadays, many people spend less and less time at home. What are the *causes* of this? What are the effects of this on individuals and on the society?

Amount of people
spend
Correct pronoun usage
who spend
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time
Use synonyms
at
Change preposition
apply
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outside rather than
home
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at home
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 .Nowadays ,modern citizens have a gruelling schedule because of their occupation or education. Communities don’t have free up some
time
Use synonyms
due to
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time consuming
Correct your spelling
time-consuming
 tasks
and
Punctuation problem
, and
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 they have to work or study from
down
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dawn
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 till dusk . Somebody’s job have strict deadline if they don’t stick to the plan in order to
running
Verb problem
avoid running
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 out of
time
Use synonyms
 .
In addition
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, in order to urban lifestyles
encouraged
Wrong verb form
encourage
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 people to engage more in social
and
Correct word choice
apply
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activities ,going to cafes, gyms, and shopping
centers
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centres
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. Technology
also
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 plays a role, as people can work, study, and communicate from virtually anywhere, reducing the need to remain at home.

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task response
Answer all parts of the task. You write about causes, but you do not write about effects on people and society.
coherence and cohesion
Add a clear ending. Your essay stops too early and has no conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Use one main idea in each part and explain it more clearly.
task response
Give simple examples to support your ideas, such as long work hours or time in cafes and gyms.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with easy words like because, so, also, and for example.
task response
You give some clear causes, such as work, study, city life, and technology.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas are mostly on the topic and easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
You use some linking words like in addition.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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