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The plans below show a student accommodation buildings 2010 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The maps illustrate the
student
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 accommodation buildings in 2010 and now.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen central building does not change,
while
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 the northern extended to
three
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 parts
instead
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 of two. As regards the southern addition to one part and
car
Correct article usage
the car
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 parking. In northern, in 2010, there was just a living room and a
student
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bedroom
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,
whereas
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 today, the living room was replaced to
student
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bedroom
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.
Thus
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, in north of area, there are
three
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student
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 bedrooms. In
southern
Correct determiner usage
the south
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, in 2010, there was just a
student
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bedroom
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,
while
Linking Words
 recently
bulding
Punctuation problem
, bulding
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 are added
en-suite
Change preposition
with en-suite
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 rooms. Another change from the 2010 building to today's building, the modern building is
making
Verb problem
providing
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 car parking
for
Change preposition
in
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 a big space. In terms of the main entrance, it is standing steady. In the centre area, there are
three
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 departments, and they remain steady
:
Punctuation problem
:
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student
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bedroom
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, bathroom, and kitchen. With respect to the garden, it has been downsized from
three
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 parts to just one part
that
Punctuation problem
, and the
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 garden in the south
is
Wrong verb form
has been
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 removed to make way for car parking.

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task response
Write a clearer overview. Say the main changes in one or two easy lines.
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Cover all key changes in a full way. Some parts are hard to understand now.
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Use more exact words for place and change, like north, south, added, replaced, and removed.
coherence and cohesion
Group ideas by area in a clear way. This helps the reader follow your map report.
coherence and cohesion
Link sentences with easy words like while, also, and however, but do not use too many.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence form. Some lines are not complete or are hard to follow.
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You gave an overview and showed the main idea of change and no change.
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You compared 2010 and now in the north, south, and centre.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has clear paragraph groups for different parts of the map.
coherence and cohesion
You used some link words like while, whereas, and in terms of.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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