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In many countries, plastic containers have become more common than ever and are used by many food and drink companies. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Plastic
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containers
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 have been used by
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societies for a very long time
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 the main reason why people
use
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plastic
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 for food packaging is because of its convenience.
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, the
use
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 of
plastic
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containers
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 has a profound impact on health and the environment.
This
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 essay will argue that the disadvantages of
plastic
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 usage outweigh the advantages.
Plastic
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containers
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 are beneficial as they are widely used for food packaging. People can find them anywhere in the
market place
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marketplace
and
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 it is more practical because most of them are only
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single-
use
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plastic
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plastics
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.
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,
plastic
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 can cause so many
problem
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such
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 as
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 waste pollution to the environment, because
plastic
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 takes so much time to decompose, it can not disappear right away after people
use
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 it
, meanwhile
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. Meanwhile
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, most of the products can only
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 used once, and most of these
plastic
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 ended up somewhere in various
part
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 of the world, and
threatens
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threaten
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 many ecosystems.
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, there is a case where a turtle's shell did not
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 properly in several areas because it was entangled in
plastic
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.
On the other hand
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,
plastic
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also
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 plays a huge role in affecting human health. There is a small
plastic
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 particle called microplastic that can
ended
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 up in our body and increase the risk of
disease
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diseases
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 like cancer. These particles can not even be prevented from entering
human
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the human
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 body because of their size
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 they are already widespread. Study says that these particles even exist in fish that we consume, and
even can
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can even
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 melt from the water gallon that we
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, even in the
part
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parts
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 of our body that
not
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are not
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 supposed to get contaminated,
microplastic
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microplastics
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 were
also
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 found in
that
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those
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 areas.
To conclude
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, there are some benefits of using
plastic
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containers
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, but it does not outweigh the disadvantages of using
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 because there
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 more problems that
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have
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 been caused by it rather than the advantages of
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use
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.

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Make your main idea more clear in each body part. Put one clear point first, then explain it.
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Give one or two more clear examples to support your ideas. This will make your answer stronger.
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Some ideas are good, but a few are too general. Add more exact detail about health and the environment.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, middle, and end, which is good. But some long sentences make it hard to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Use shorter sentences and clearer linking words so the reader can follow your meaning more easily.
coherence and cohesion
Some parts repeat the word plastic many times. Try to use better sentence flow and avoid very long chains of ideas.
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You answer the question clearly and give your opinion from the start.
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You stay on the topic all through the essay.
coherence and cohesion
You have an introduction, two body parts, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Your paragraph order is easy to see.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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