Some think newspapers are the best method for reading the news while others think other media is better. Discuss both views anf give your opinion ?

The technological nuance has become a central part of our lives. From ordering groceries and medicines online to reading recent news, everything is available to us within just a few clicks.
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their own charm
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reading online is really convenient for other sections of
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society. Newspapers are slowly becoming rare
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still being used by some segments of our society.
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, older adults, who are visually receptive, prefers newspaper because the process of reading from paper is more convenient for them. They find it difficult to operate their cell phones and laptops
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between different applications (often abbreviated as apps) on the phone.
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, if newspaper becomes a thing of the past, most papers will be saved.
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, our grandparents not only read the news, but
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used it as a medium to play sudoku or other games, which the online
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doesn't offer its readers. Reading from other
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is safe for our environment since it doesn't waste pages.
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, it is available at the tips of our hands
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, it is conveniently used amongst youngsters, who are
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,
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online news could be more expensive and not many people could actually afford
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, in
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technological world, there are so many
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that the general public gets confused. They may have difficulty
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choosing which information is legit and if the website is from a trusted or accredited source. Online
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amount of benefits
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its easy convenience and availability to all the sections of society
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reading from newspapers could somewhat cost our mother earth some
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, in my opinion, after looking at the benefits and shortcomings of both and comparing the repercussions, I believe online
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has the greater weightage since AI is the future of our world.

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Answer both sides in a more equal way. You write more about online news than newspapers.
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Make your opinion very clear from the start and keep it the same to the end.
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Use more direct examples for each main idea. This will make your points stronger.
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Some ideas are not fully clear, like AI in the last line. Explain how it links to news.
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Your essay has a clear start, body, and end, which is good.
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Use linking words more carefully. Some parts feel a little sudden or not well joined.
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Keep one main idea in each paragraph. This will make your writing easier to follow.
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Some sentences are too long. Shorter sentences can make your meaning clearer.
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You discuss both newspapers and online media, so you answer the main task.
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You give a clear opinion in the conclusion.
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You include some examples, like older people and sudoku, which help your ideas.
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The essay has four clear paragraphs.
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The introduction and conclusion are both present.
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Most ideas move in a logical order.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

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