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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

Write a letter to the local council about the problem of the road near your house Explain where you live Describe the problem Explain when you want him to do

Dear
sir
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Sir
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madam
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Madam
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, I am writing to draw your attention to a
road
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 near my home. I am Rupinder Kaur
who
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 has been living in the Ajit Colony for the
last
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 two decades. The area is located at the intersection of Drive
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 and Brasway
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.
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, my house number is 22 East Drive, located in Bathinda city, and the postal number is 23434. The
road
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 is in poor condition, especially in rainy weather.
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 is because there are some big potholes, which are filled with rainwater. Since the
tires
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 of vehicles are stuck in them, owners usually have to hire a mechanic to move their vehicles. I would appreciate it if you could maintain the
road
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's condition. You can either reconstruct or fill the potholes, which would be an ideal solution for
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 scenario. I am looking forward to your positive consideration. Yours sincerely, Rupinder Kaur

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task response
For task response: You answer all parts of the task, but the last point is not fully clear. Say exactly when you want the council to fix the road.
task response
For task response: Use a more direct request, for example: 'Please repair the road as soon as possible, before the next rainy season.'
coherence cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: Your letter is easy to follow and each paragraph has one main idea. This is good.
coherence cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: Some link words can be better. 'This is because' is not the best choice here. You can say 'As a result' or 'Because of this'.
task response
For task response: You clearly explain where you live and what the road problem is.
coherence cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear opening, body, and closing.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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