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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features，and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features，and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the
amount
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number
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 of passengers looking for a Caribbean
island
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 from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
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, both
visitors
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 (staying on cruise ships and staying on
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island
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the island
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) had some fluctiations but in the
beginning
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visitors
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 staying on
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island
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the island
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 had the lead
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while
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 in the
end
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 it's the opposite.
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, two of them rose gradually over the period.
Visitors
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 staying on cruise ships had the same number in 2010 and 2012
which
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, which
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 is
quart
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a quarter
 of
the
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a
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 million
,
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;
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 it doubled
itself
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in
years
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the years
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 2011 and 2013. After
2013
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2013,
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this
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 quantity climbed
steadly
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steadily
 and hit the peak with 2
millions
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million
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 in the year 2017.
Visitors
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 staying on
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island
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the island
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 remained consistent between 2010 and 2011 with approximatly among 0,5 and 1 million. After a big improvement from 0,75 to 1,5 millions in 2013, the count
experinced
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experienced
 a period of stability until 2015. From 2015 to
2017
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2017,
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 the
millions
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number
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 of
visitors
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 fell slightly and
then
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 quickly recovered the same amount.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • gradual increase
  • sharp decline
  • steady growth
  • plateau
  • seasonal variation
  • external influences
  • tourist influx
  • sustainable tourism
  • economic impact
  • hospitality industry
  • travel restrictions
  • visitor statistics
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