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Band 4

The number of people working online from home has grown in some countries. What advantages and disadvantages can come of this trend?

Nowadays
working
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, working
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 online is slightly famous jobs that most people in the present love to do
beacause
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because
 anybody can do
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this
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these
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 jobs
just only
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as long as
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 you have
one
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a
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 mobile phone and internet,that will gain a
lot
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 of money for you.
There
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Therefore
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for
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for,
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 it
is depented
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depends
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 on the quality of
product
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the product
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, the
presenting
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presentation,
 and the
margeting
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marketing
 that will help you to promote
and
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apply
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awareness for
consumer
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consumers
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.
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Moreover
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Moreover,
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 it is have a many applications that provide for sale
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such
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, such
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 as Amazon, Shoppe, Lazada or another platfrom online
, that
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platform, that
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 can help you to represent
you
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your
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 product
easier
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more easily
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.
Significately
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Significantly
, working online
have
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has
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 not
to
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apply
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fixed
you
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your
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 schedule
you
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; you
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 can manage
you
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your
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 time and balance
you
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your
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 life cycle that different form the employee that they have a time table that seted from their company.
There
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Therefore
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for
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for,
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 we will see a trend of people
tranfered
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transferred
 to working on the online market
like
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, like
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 influencer, tiktoker and
reviewer
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reviewer,
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 to make a salary from
online
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the online
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 sector.
in
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On
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 the other hand, working online has
a most
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the
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 biggest disadvantages
,
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;
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 it
is make
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creates
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 a
lot
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 of competition in
this
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 field, especially
the foreigner's business
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foreign businesses
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 that came in our country to
find
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make
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 a profit in
online
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the online
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 market
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, so
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so it
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which
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 will
effect for
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affect
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 GDP and
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overall
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the overall
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economic
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economy
.
Moreover
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, Thailand has a
lot
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 of family that have a poor opportunity
that they can
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to
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 buy a mobile phone that hard
of
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for
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 them to
working
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work
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 online.
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However
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However,
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 for my personality i think working online has a
lot
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 of
benifits
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benefits
 that you can grow
but
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, but
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 you must
to concern
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be concerned
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 about
expenditure
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the expenditure
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 of your country.

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task response
Answer both sides in a more equal way. You talk more about good points than bad points.
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Add clearer main ideas for each body part. Start each part with one clear point.
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Use one or two simple real examples to support your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Group ideas better. Put all good points in one part and all bad points in one part.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words in a correct way, like 'On the one hand', 'On the other hand', 'For example', and 'In conclusion'.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence order. Some sentences are hard to follow because ideas change too fast.
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You answer the topic and talk about both advantages and disadvantages.
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You give some clear good points, like free time and easy access to online work.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a beginning, body, and ending.
coherence and cohesion
You use some linking words to connect ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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