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Writing Samples
Band 5

1.Some people say that E- books and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines to what extent do you agree or disagree.

The notion that E-books and modern
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 will take over the reading space and make the
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traditional
 medium of
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newspapers
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 and magazines obsolete is certainly not new and
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 debated
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 personally believe that as the world progresses forward, there shall exist
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 of vastly more sophisticated and advanced technologies that shall totally replace all current forms of semantic information consumption. The heavy integration of artificial intelligence in our daily lives, its abrupt rise in popularity and development enabled by large language models,
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 the hastening of brain-computer interfaces, already hint at a technologically bright and wondrous
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. Information as we address it at the moment
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 might cease to exist as a
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 resource
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 and may as well exist in a brain-native database that could be recalled at any moment with one's will.
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, upon observing the broader picture, there exists not a single definitive date or time that one could stamp as the day, the
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 paper or book is printed. Even with the introduction of incomprehensible technologies, dispersal takes time and heavily depends on the lens
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 people view
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. Cost-effectiveness always plays a
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crucial
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 of
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 considering how cheaply available and accessible
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newspapers
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 and magazines can be, the utter dissolution of
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 forms of literary ingestion is not easily predictable nor a possibility in the near future. In conclusion, given enough time,
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 shall become indistinguishable from utter magic and long after we pass away, go way beyond our current comprehension. But, for the foreseeable future, the ready availability and convenience of papers ensure their survival
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 their existence shall continue to literarily arm people.

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Answer the question more directly. Say clearly if you agree, disagree, or partly agree, and keep this view all through the essay.
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Focus more on e-books, newspapers, and magazines. Some ideas about future technology are interesting, but they move away from the main topic.
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Use more real and clear examples, like cost, ease of use, internet access, or reading habits.
coherence and cohesion
Make each main paragraph support one clear point. This will make your ideas easier to follow.
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Link ideas in a simpler way. Some long sentences make the meaning hard to follow.
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Use clear topic sentences at the start of body paragraphs, then explain them step by step.
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You give a clear opinion in the introduction and again in the conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a basic clear shape: introduction, body, and conclusion.
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Your ideas are thoughtful and show strong interest in the topic.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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