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The chart below compare the number of people per household in the UK in 1981 and 2001

The bar chart shows information about the number of
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 who inhabited each household in the UK in 2 different years (1981 and 2001).
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, it is clear from the chart that most of the biggest categories were those which had 1 to 3
people
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, accounting for about 70-75%, and the remaining 25-30% with 4-6
people
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. In 1981, the dominating category was that with 2 persons per house, covering 31% of all. The next place, which is a 3-person house with 20%, was higher than single householders, which had 17% at the same time. Other categories, which summed up to 32%, were those with 4, 5 and 6
people
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 (18%, 8%, 6%). Regarding 20 years later, in 2001, individuals began splitting into smaller numbers,
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 as double-peopled with 34%, single with 26%, and triple-peopled with 17% of all. The smallest groups were those with a larger number of
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 — householders with 4
people
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 at 15%, with 5 — 6% and 6 with 2%

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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