In recent years, many people have adopted a minimalistist lifestyle, choosing to own only essential possessions. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this way of living?

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essay will present the advantages and disadvantages of
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lifestyle
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a minimalist
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lifestyle
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can help to keep your space clean and neat.
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, a person is living a busy life and doesn'
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have any time to clean
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house, so with a
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the
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person doesn'
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have much
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that can create a mess.
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, for some
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clean spaces help to think and concentrate because there is nothing that can distract them.
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, a girl is studying for a really important test
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she needs to concentrate, so in a messy room there would be plenty of
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, but because of a
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lifestyle
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there aren'
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so many distractions.
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Minimalistist
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can
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have a negative side. If you only have
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that is
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essential to survive, you may not have
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that brings joy.
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, a boy grew up with parents
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adopted the
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and
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during his
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he didn'
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have any toys, because they weren'
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essential. The boy didn'
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know the fun of playing and having fun, so he may begin to suppress those emotions.
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, having
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that is
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not always essential can be useful.
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, your class is having a photo shoot
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everyone decides to do a theme, but the photoshoot is in two days, so having extra clothes may save you the trouble of picking out an
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. In conclusion, there isn'
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a corset chose between
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or not. You can only choose what fits you more.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...
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