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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.

The bar chart illustrates the annual income range of
families
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 in the US in 2007, 2011 and 2015.
Overall
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,
maximum
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the maximum
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number
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 of
households
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 earned $100000 or more over the years,
whereas
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minimum
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the minimum
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number
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 of
households
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 earned between the range of $75000 and $99999.
Furthermore
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, those
families
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 that earned from $50000 to $74,999 remained almost stable over the period given. In 2007, 25
million
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families
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' annual earnings stood at less than $25000, which increased to almost 29
million
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 in 2011, and
then
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 slightly dropped to nearly 28
million
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 in 2015.
Similarly
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, those
families
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 which earned annually between $25000 and $49999 accounted for approximately 27
million
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 in 2007, and
then
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 experienced an increase to just below 30
million
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 in 2011, before declining to around 28
million
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families
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.
for
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For
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 the remaining figures, a similar
number
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 of
households
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' ( about 21
million
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 ) annual income range amounted to around $50000 to $74999 in all three given years. The lowest
number
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 of
families
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 made money from $75000 to $99999, which recorded 15
million
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 in 2015. In 2007, just below $30
million
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families
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 earned $100000 or more, and
then
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 slightly decreased in 2011, before
soared
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 to about 33
million
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households
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 in 2015, which figure recorded as the highest.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words families, number, households, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic landscape
  • Household income
  • Economic health
  • Income brackets
  • Trends
  • Inflation
  • Unemployment rates
  • Job market
  • Income disparity
  • Housing affordability
  • Access to education
  • Quality of life
  • Economic policies
  • Income inequality
  • Mitigating
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