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Band 5

When designing city landscapes, is it more beneficial to prioritize the conservation of historical architecture or to favor the development of modern, functional structures?

Whether cities preserve
its
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 historic
buildings
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 or demolish them for making places for modern city structures is a topic for considerable debate. I personally believe that maintaining old structures is more beneficial as they carry cultural value and can bring economic advantages. The first reason to preserve historic
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 is that they represent the glorious history of the
country
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 and
cultural
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 identity.
Its
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 risky to destroy historical
buildings
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 because it can cause a
lot
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 of
opposite groups
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, with people who
claims
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 that the historical heritage cannot be replaced.
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, many European downtowns,
such
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 as
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 Rome
,
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 Prague, attract millions of visitors every year because they have maintained their glorious historical
centers
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. Those
buildings
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 create a unique aura and atmosphere that modern skyscrapers cannot replace
them
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. That’s why
,
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 preserving old architecture helps maintain
a
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 sense of history of the
country
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. The second reason, from the historical places,
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country
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 can gain a
lot
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 of money. For a
lot
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 of people, skyscrapers and modern
buildings
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 can be boring, because people can see them everywhere, but they cannot give the aura of the historical
buildings
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. That’s why holiday-makers heads to the historical cities for explore the history of the nation, on the ground that, millions of tourists can come to the
country
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 and the government can gain a
lot
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 of money because of it. As I mentioned before, cities like Rome
,
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 Prague
attracts
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 a
lot
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 of
tourist
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tourists
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 to the
country
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, and it’s too beneficial for the
country
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. Demolishing structures and constructing new ones often requires far more energy and resources, even
causes to
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 environmental waste. In conclusion,
centers
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 should
prioritize
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 the preservation of historic
buildings
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 because
the
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they
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 provide cultural identity and economic benefits.
While
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 modern development is important, it’s necessary to keep the heritage that enriches both local residents and visitors.

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Answer both sides a bit more before you give your view.
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Make each main idea clear with one strong reason and one clear example.
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Check that every sentence helps your main point.
coherence cohesion
Use simple links like First, Also, For example, and In conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Keep one idea in one sentence when you can.
coherence cohesion
Be careful with repeated ideas, as they can make the essay less clear.
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You give a clear view from the start and keep it to the end.
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You use real city examples like Rome and Prague.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear opening, body, and ending.
coherence cohesion
Most ideas follow in a clear order.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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