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The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Thr
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The
 line graph gives information about
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the comparison
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 of car theft in Sweden, France, Canada and Great Britain from 1990 to 1999.
Overall
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, Great Britain showed
overwhelming
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an overwhelming
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 chart compared to
other
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the other
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 three countries,
while
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 Sweden depicted the biggest upward
trend
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. Turning to the details, first of all, in GBR, 18,000
vehice
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vehicle
 thefts were recorded in 1990. In the other three countries, meanwhile,
under
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fewer than
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 9,000
vehicle
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vehicles
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 were robbed. The theft
trend
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 in GBR fluctuated over the period, but since 1996, the
trend
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mantain
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has maintained
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 downward,
then
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 recorded about 16,000 in 1999. In Sweden, since 1991, at 8,000, the
figure
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 increased gradually throughout the period.
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 in 1999, the thefts
record
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apply
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reached
to
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apply
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around 14,000. In France and Canada, their theft
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figure
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figures
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 were under 7 in 1990. The
trend
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 in France
,
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apply
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 went up and down and in 1999,
recorded
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it recorded
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 6,000. In Canada, the
figure
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decrease
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decreased
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 to 5,000 in 1993 and after
the
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that
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 year, the
figure
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inclined
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increased
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 slightly until 1999.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words trend, figure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • theft rate
  • fluctuations
  • trend
  • vehicle theft
  • per thousand vehicles
  • decade
  • steady increase
  • steep decline
  • comparative analysis
  • noteworthy changes
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