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The graph below shows the consumption of three spreads from 1981 to 2007

The graph below
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Correct subject-verb agreement
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 the consumption of three spreads from time to time.
Overall
Linking Words
, the three lines
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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 Margarine
Linking Words
also
Punctuation problem
, also
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 Low fat & reduced spreads and
Buttter
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Butter
.The Butter
line
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 had
incerased
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increased
 from 140 to 160
,
Punctuation problem
;
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Linking Words
however
Punctuation problem
however,
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 after
that
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that,
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 the
line
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 had a sharp
decrased
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decrease
 from 160 to 60.
Linking Words
Moreover
Add a comma
Moreover,
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 the Margarine
line
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 in 1981 had a minor feel but in 1986 the
line
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 had a gradual rose untl
1996
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1996,
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 next the
line
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 had a rapid
decrased unitl
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decrease until
 2007.
Then
Linking Words
 the
last
Linking Words
line
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 is Low fat & reduced spreads had a sharp
rose
Replace the word
rise
from 1996 until 2001
and
Punctuation problem
, and
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 from 0
gram
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grams
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 until 80 grams
Punctuation problem
. Also,
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also
Linking Words
 in
2001
Punctuation problem
2001,
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 it was a slow
decreasing
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decrease
 until 2007
Punctuation problem
. Also,
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also
Linking Words
 the three lines had
fluctuasted
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fluctuated
 from 1981 until 2007
and
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, and
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 from 0 grams until 180 grams

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words line with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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