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Band 2.5

Some people think that living in a country is essential to learn that country’s language and culture. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many people believe that
Living
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living
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 in a
country
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 can help them to learn the
langauge
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language
 and the
cullture
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culture
 of that
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country
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country,
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 in which they will engage with people
that
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who
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 can speak the
language
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and
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, and
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theey
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they
 can ask them about the
culture
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 and give them feedback to improve.
Firstly
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,
i
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 agree that it can be easier to learn a
language
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 in
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 home
country
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 and learn the
culture
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 from the
mother land
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motherland
but
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 it can be quite expensive to do so
,
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. Secondly,
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secondly
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 it may take a
while
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 for you to learn a
language
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six
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 months or more to be exact.
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Furthermore
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 in modern
days
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days,
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 you can learn a
language
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 from the comfort of your home from apps
ssuch
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such
 as duolingo where you can practice
evveryday
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every day
 and notice progress quickly. In the end i do think that moving to another
country
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 in order to learn to speak their langauge and. Their
culture
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 is beneficial to an extent, if you have enough money to do so and
dont
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don't
 have anything
tiying
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tying
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 i belive it'sApproachable.
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However
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 nowadays you can do that from your own
country
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and
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 there are so many apps to help you learn any
langauge
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language
 and any
culture
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Answer the question more directly. Say clearly how much you agree or disagree in the first part.
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Add one or two clear examples to support your ideas. This will make your points stronger.
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Explain your main ideas more fully. Some points are short and need more detail.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear paragraphing: intro, body, body, conclusion. This will make your essay easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas more smoothly. Some sentences feel joined in a simple way, so the flow is weak.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence form and word order. Small mistakes make some parts hard to understand.
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You answer the main topic and give your opinion.
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You mention both sides: living in the country and learning from home.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a beginning and an ending.
coherence and cohesion
Some linking words are used, like firstly, secondly, furthermore, and however.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • immersion
  • acquisition
  • nuances
  • idiomatic expressions
  • context
  • global connectivity
  • cultural programs
  • media consumption
  • firsthand experience
  • frequent opportunities
  • substantial understanding
  • cultural shock
  • alternative methods
  • viable options
  • natural interaction
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