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You have just read an article in an inernational travel magazie which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of magazie. IN your letter - Correct the information in the article - Explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information - Suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

I am writing
this
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 letter to draw your attention towards an issue of wrong
information
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 printed in your travel magazine, which
has
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was
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 published
last
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 week. Please allow me to elaborate
further
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 on
this
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. I always like to read articles from your magazines. So, one day I found your newly released magazine
from
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on
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 Google, and I read that whole article, which was based on the history and culture of various towns
from
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in
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 the Ontario province. But I caught two
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information
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 wrong. The first one is the name of the king, and
then
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 there is insufficient
information
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 about
ancient
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the ancient
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 monuments of our town. I believe that I have to correct that
information
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 because it might provide
wrong
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the wrong
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information
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 to every reader.
Moreover
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,
this
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 kind of misleading data can down reputation among
the
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other countries. So, I would like to suggest that before producing a magazine on a specific topic, every journalist should arrange a meeting with the experts.
Furthermore
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,
manager
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also
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 have to proofread those documents before signed that documents. I look forward to hearing from you. Your sincerely, Prit Patel

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Answer all three parts in a more clear way.
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Say the wrong facts in a more exact way.
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Use a more formal tone in the whole letter.
coherence and cohesion
Put one main idea in each body part.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with clear words like also, because, and so.
coherence and cohesion
Use the closing form correctly: Yours sincerely.
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You wrote about all three points in the task.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, body, and end.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas are easy to follow in most parts.
The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • correct
  • wrong
  • fact
  • article
  • editor
  • readers
  • town
  • place
  • event
  • day
  • month
  • year
  • distance
  • near
  • old
  • new
  • source
  • check
  • verify
  • update
  • online
  • print
  • apology
  • error
  • fix
  • idea
  • suggest
  • respond
  • report
  • future
  • trust
  • help
  • local
  • official
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