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Band 6.5

The graph gives information about the age of the population of Iceland between 1990 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph provides key information about
age
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the age
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 of the population of Iceland
at
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during
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 the period
of
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apply
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1990 to 2020. The units are measured in percentage.
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overall
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Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that the age of 25 - 54 had the
highst popultion
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highest population
 of Iceland between 1990
to
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and
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 2020.
In addition
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, both
of
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the
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 15 - 24 and 0 -14
have
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age groups have
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decrease
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decreased
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 clearly,
whereas
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over 65 old people
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people over 65
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 have not
change
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changed
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 that much.
According to
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 what is shown, 25 - 54 had the
hugest increas
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highest increase
, starting
by
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in
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 1990 with around 32% reaching 48% at 2020.
On the other
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hand
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hand,
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 people above 65 had
stable
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a stable
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 percentage starting with 12% in 1990
peaking
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, peaking
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 15% in 2010
and
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, and
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decreases
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decreasing
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 to 14% by 2020.
looking
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Looking
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 closely
to
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at
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 the data, 55-64 haven't change alot
also
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 starting with 13% by 1990 decreases to 10% in 2020
,
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. On
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on the other
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hand
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hand,
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 0 - 14 had
big
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a big
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 drop
starting
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, starting
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 with 25% by 1990
ending
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, ending
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 at 18% in 2020.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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