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The charts below show the most common complaints of passengers of two international airlines plus their passengers\' overall satisfaction level.

The two pie charts show the most frequent
passenger
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complaints
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 of two international airlines
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, as
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 well as their passengers' satisfaction. The airlines are
One
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World
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Air
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 and Blue
Sky
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Airways
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.
Overall
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, the
complaints
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 fall into seven categories
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:
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 low-quality food, poor customer service, expensive tickets, lost or delayed luggage, delayed or cancelled flights, limited
space
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 on the aircraft, and others. The most common
objection
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 about both airlines are expensive tickets and the lack of
space
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 on board. More than a third of
One
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World
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Air
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 passengers have complained about ticket prices,
while
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 29% have complained about limited
space
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 onboard.
In contrast
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, the most common complaint about Blue
Sky
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Airways
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 is the limited
space
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 on planes, which accounts for 36% of all
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complaints
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. Expensive ticket
complaints
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 account for 31% of
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 criticism and are the second most common source of
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 discontent. Third and fourth positions go to delayed or cancelled flights (28%)
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 and poor customer service (22%), respectively, as the causes of consumer dissatisfaction with
One
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World
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Air
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. The third and fourth most common
complaints
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 against Blue
Sky
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Airways
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 are allegations of low-quality food for nearly a quarter and delayed or cancelled flights, respectively.
This
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 is mirrored in the
overall
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 satisfaction rating as well, with Blue
Sky
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Airways
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 receiving 87% compared to
One
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World
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Air
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's approximately
three quarters
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three-quarters
.
criticism
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 concerning customer service with the previous airline amounted to merely 3%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words passenger, complaints, one, world, air, sky, airways, space with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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