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Band 4

News stories on TV and in newspapers are very often accompanied by pictures. Some people say that these pictures are more effective than words. What is your opinion about this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In the modern era, images can be seen in both news channels and newspapers.
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, there is considerable debate over whether
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 are less valuable than photographs. I strongly disagree with the viewpoint.
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 with, one of the main reasons for the effectiveness of
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 over pictures is that
words
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 can often convey the full story behind the situation. People can get the knowledge of locations and reasons, which may seem infeasible for pictures, thereby disseminating
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awareness among individuals.
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, language makes it feasible to acquire
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information about the repercussions of the war in Gaza and the survival rate of the affected
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.
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,
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 can be a powerful tool to
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 empathy among
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 rather than pictures. Unlike photographs, they allow the readers to experience the personal struggles and emotions of other
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, which can foster social cohesion.
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, in some parts of India, a couple of weeks ago, farmers' crops were destroyed
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 heavy rain and strong
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. The
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 expressed
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 feelings and emotions
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 the scenario via a Punjab News channel, which empowered others to offer help to them.
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, I believe that
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 are more beneficial than visuals as they have the power to express situations thoroughly and contribute to shaping society by fostering empathy among
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coherence cohesion
Make your main idea more clear in each body part at the start of the part.
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Add a bit more support for each example so the reader can see how it proves your point.
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Answer the question in a more full way by also saying why some people may like pictures, then show why you still disagree.
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Use examples that are more direct and easy to link to your main idea.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, two body parts, and a clear end.
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Your position is clear from the start and stays the same all through the essay.
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You use real world examples, which helps make your ideas feel real.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • empathize
  • instantaneous comprehension
  • irrefutable evidence
  • transcend language barriers
  • overreliance
  • oversimplification
  • misinformation
  • desensitizing
  • nuance
  • in-depth analysis
  • symbiotic relationship
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