There have been some problems with public transport in your area recently. Write a letter to the manager of the transport company. In your letter: Describe the problems Explain how these problems are affecting the public Suggest some changes that could be made.

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Dear Sir, I am writing
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letter to express my concern about various recent issues with the public transport services in our region.
Firstly
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, many
buses
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have limited routes and inflexible schedules, meaning that not all destinations are easily accessible.
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, during peak hours, they often arrive late or are delayed. On several occasions, I have had to wait for over 30 minutes for a bus, which caused me to miss part of a lesson and feel quite stressed.
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,
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are frequently overcrowded, resulting in a lack of personal space and potential health risks
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close contact. These issues are having a serious effect on the public. Many commuters, including students and office workers,
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are compelled to walk long distances to reach bus stops or
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arrive late
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at their destinations.
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negatively affects their productivity and daily routines.
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, the overcrowded conditions increase stress levels and may pose health and safety risks, especially for elderly passengers. To tackle these matters, I would suggest improving the scheduling system to ensure
buses
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run on time more consistently. Increasing the number of
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during rush hours and
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essential routes could help reduce overcrowding and offer more options for residents.
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, providing real-time updates through a mobile app or electronic displays at bus stops would allow passengers to plan their journeys more effectively. I hope you will take these concerns
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and
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take appropriate action to improve the quality of service. Thank you for
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your attention
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to
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issue. I look forward to your response. Yours faithfully, Tam.

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For task response: you answer all parts of the task with clear problems, effects, and changes.
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For task response: your tone is polite and right for a formal letter.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: your letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: each paragraph mostly stays on one main point.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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