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Band 7.5

There have been some problems with public transport in your area recently. Write a letter to the manager of the transport company. In your letter: Describe the problems Explain how these problems are affecting the public Suggest some changes that could be made.

Dear Sir, I am writing to complain about the recent problems with the public transport service in our area. Recently,
buses
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 have been very unreliable. They often arrive late or sometimes do not come at all.
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, many
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 are old and in poor condition, and some of them even break down during trips.
This
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 makes it very difficult for passengers to depend on the service. These issues are affecting many people in the community. Students are frequently late for school, and workers are
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 arriving late for their jobs. Elderly people are especially affected because they find it hard to deal with long waiting times and broken
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. Because of these problems, some people are starting to avoid
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 and look for other ways to travel,
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 as buying motorbikes. To improve the situation, I suggest that the company add more
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 and make sure they run on time. It is
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 important to repair and maintain the
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 regularly so they are safer and more reliable. Thank you for your attention to
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 matter. Yours faithfully, Thi.

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task response
For task response: You answer all parts of the task, but you can add one more clear detail about how often the problem happens.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: Your ideas are easy to follow. To make it even better, add one more linking word like 'also' or 'as a result'.
task response
For task response: You describe the problems, say how people are hurt by them, and give good ways to fix them.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end, and each paragraph has one main idea.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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