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The growing number of overweight people is putting strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issue involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculam. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In recent years, there has been a growing debate about whether anyone can create
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poetry
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,
music
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,and more.
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, others argue that anyone able to create
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 essay will discuss both views and my own point of view. One main reason is that many believe anyone could be creative because when individuals use methods to develop their ability to be productive, which allows them to earn a valuble skills,
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poetry
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, in the Kingdom of Saudi Arabia , the Ministry of Education helps students to learn about
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 and painting
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art
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artificial citizens.
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, when thinking that a person should be a talnted to earn
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 is because many arts are impossible to learn.
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,
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 and singing require a handful of years of
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 and learning. which shows the difficulty of many arts. In my point of view, I believe that many of the arts are difficult to learn and practice
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, individuals must read
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 because it is easier to create
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. In conclusion,
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 and singing is difficult ,
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there are
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 predcted to be explored with the arifical intelligence, and many prefer not to learn things
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Answer the question more clearly. Say your view in a direct way and keep it the same through the essay.
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Develop each main idea with a clear reason and one simple example.
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Make sure your examples really support your point and are easy to understand.
coherence and cohesion
Use one main idea for each body paragraph. This will make your writing easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like first, also, however, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence order and punctuation, because some sentences are too long or not complete.
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You answered both sides of the topic and gave your own view.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear intro, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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You used an example about Saudi Arabia to support an idea.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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