Some people prefer to live in hot climates, whereas others love the lifestyle in countries with cold climates. Discuss both views and explain which climate you prefer.

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audiences prefer to
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in warm
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,
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others think that cold climates are better to live
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I think that warm climates are better because I
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don't
like being cold. On the one hand, many individuals love to live in cold
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because they can
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experience
snow. A lot of people think that cold weather is better because they can play with snow
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nearly all
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year
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, individuals may enjoy styling their clothes because they will wear more layers
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cold
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a cold
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climate.
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, some audiences believe that warm
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better than freezing weather because they
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not like being cold all the time. People can do many entertaining
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activities
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as swimming, playing beach
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volleyball
, walking across the seaside and many other things.
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a person wants to sunbathe, he can only do so in hot weather because you cant do a sunbathe at 0 degrees
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Celsius
. In conclusion, I like the warm
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rather than
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the cold
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ones because I think the
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activities
are more amusing and funny.

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Answer both sides more fully. You talk about cold and warm weather, but the cold side is short.
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Give a clearer reason for your choice. 'I do not like being cold' is too simple. Add one or two strong reasons.
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Use more clear and real examples. The beach example is good, but you need one more example for the cold side.
coherence and cohesion
Make your ideas link in a smoother way. Some lines feel a bit sudden.
coherence and cohesion
Use the same words in a careful way. 'audiences' is not the right word here, and some sentences are hard to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Build each body part with one main idea, then explain it, then give an example.
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You answer both parts of the question and give your own view.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear opening, two body parts, and an ending.
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You use simple examples to support your ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate
  • prefer
  • lifestyle
  • hot climates
  • cold climates
  • outdoor activities
  • social interactions
  • active lifestyle
  • laid-back attitude
  • longer daylight hours
  • strong sense of community
  • seasonal changes
  • cozy indoor gatherings
  • pest control
  • picturesque
  • mental well-being
  • personal lifestyle choices
  • health considerations
  • winter sports
  • refreshing air
  • invigorating
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