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Band 1

The following plans show recent archeological findings at a historic site in the year 2004 and 2014.

The two maps illustrate the changes which occurred in the historic site
in years
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between 2004 and 2014
Overall
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, the area had
modernized
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modernised
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, and new opportunities
added
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had been added
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, creating facilities and convenience to individuals who lived in
this
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 area. In 2004, there was an enormous sea on the south-east
side
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 of the layout. The
trees
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located
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are located
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 on the western
side
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 of the map.
Large
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A large
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 ancient temple situated on the south
side
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 of the map
which
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, which
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adjacent
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is adjacent
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 to the sea.
Number
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A number
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 of ancient houses were adjacent to a big mountain on the northern
side
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. By 2014, the mountain disappeared,
Linking Words
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and instead
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instead
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instead,
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 ancient houses
built
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were built
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. Only one bigger ancient house remained steady. Adjacent to
houses
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houses,
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 an ancient toilet
constructed
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was constructed
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. Ancient stadium relocated to
trees
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.
Remaining
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The remaining
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trees
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 were cut. The ancient in its place. Next to the
trees
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 ancient palace
established
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was established
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.

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task response
Write a clearer overview. Say the main changes in one simple sentence.
coherence and cohesion
Compare the two years more clearly. Group old and new parts in a better way.
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Explain each main change with a full sentence.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words like 'in 2004', 'by 2014', 'while', and 'however' to guide the reader.
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Do not add ideas that are not clear from the map, like people living there, unless the map shows this.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence grammar, because broken sentences make the order hard to follow.
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You gave an overview, which is important for Task 1.
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You mentioned some key places in both years, such as the sea, temple, houses, and trees.
coherence and cohesion
You tried to organize the report by year: 2004 first and 2014 next.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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