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The table illustrates the proportion of people using three different types of transportation system including car bus and bicycle from 1990 to 2010 an the predictions for 2030. And the accompanying chart shows the average commuting times per day.

The table illustrates the proportion of people using three different types of transportation system including car bus and bicycle from 1990 to 2010 an the predictions for 2030. And the accompanying chart shows the average commuting times per day.
The table illustrates the proportion of
people
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 using three different types of transportation system including
car
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bus
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, bus
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and
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, and
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 bicycle
from
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, from
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 1990 to 2010 an the predictions for 2030. And the accompanying chart shows the average commuting times per day.
Overall
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, the figures for the percentage of
transports
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transport
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usage
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 vary significantly across the 3 transport systems.
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 the proportion of
people
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 who preferred to use
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car
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a car
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 stands out for
their
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its
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 increase from the starting point and
it
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apply
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is currently projected to see
the
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apply
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further
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 increase, the
bus
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usage
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 is anticipated to dip after declining
thorough out
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throughout
 the period. It is
also
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 evident that
percentage
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the percentage
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 of those who used
bicycle
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bicycles
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 remained stable and it is predicted to do the same.
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, the time spent
for
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apply
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commuting is projected to continue its upward trend. Focusing first on the proportions of
people
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. Starting with the
car
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usage
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, 45% in 1990, considerably more than their counterparts who preferred
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bus
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the bus
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 in the same year.
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, since the turn of
millennium
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the millennium
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, the former figure is up 7%,
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 the latter is down almost 7%. Based on the anticipations for 2030,
car
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usage
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 will rise to 60
percent
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per cent
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while
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 the figure for
bus
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usage
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 will
be decreased
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decrease
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 by 8%. Those who opted for
bicycle
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a bicycle
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is
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are
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 predicted to remain stable, constituting for 20% in all those years. When it comes to talking about commuting time, the average duration grew gradually. In 1990,
people
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 spent 30 minutes
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using
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 public transport,
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this
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which
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 was followed by a climb to an estimated 40 minutes in 2010.
compared
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Compared
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 to
previous
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the previous
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 2010 performance, it is projected to reach 50 minutes per day by 2030.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, car, bus, usage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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