The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph provides key information about
population
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the population
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in four Asian countries living in citiies ate the
perod
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period
of 1970 to
2020
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2020,
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with predictions for 2030 and 2040. The units are measured in percentage.
Overall
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, it is clear from the line graph that all of
(
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the
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Philippines,
malaysia
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Malaysia
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, Thailand and Indonesia
)
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apply
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have increased.
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addition
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addition,
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Malaysia had the highset increased,
whereas
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Thailand had the lowest.
According to
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what is
shown
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shown,
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Malaysia had the
highset
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highest
growth
at
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in
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total population
starting
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, starting
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with 30% in 1970
acheving
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, acheving
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45% by 1990 juming to around 82% at 2040.
In
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On
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the other
hand
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hand,
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Thailand had the lowest growth in the total population
starting
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, starting
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with 19% by 1970 acheving around 45% in 2040.
turining
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to the middle range,
Philippines
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the Philippines
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begin
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began
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with around 32% in 1970
jumping
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, jumping
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to 50% by 1990 and falling to 45% at
2010
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2010,
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then
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fainlly increase to around 55% in 2040. Indonesia had semaler thing, where it started at 13% by 1970
increasing
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, increasing
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to 60% in 2040.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • cities
  • Asian countries
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • estimations
  • urban
  • increasing
  • steadily
  • Japan
  • China
  • rise
  • urbanization
  • South Korea
  • India
  • upward trend
  • slow pace
  • surpass
  • resided
  • projected
  • moderate increase
  • significant surge
  • exceed
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