Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, some people believe that it is better for both genders to attend mixed
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. At the same time, others believe that boys and girls should attend separate
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. Personally, I agree with the latter statement.
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, I will discuss both views and support my opinion throughout the essay. On the one hand, when boys and girls attend separate
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, they focus more on their studies. They won't get distracted by topics related to relationships, and would lock in to their education.
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, nowadays, people argue that lots of minors are distracted by relationships and talking stages that follow a specific trend. By that, young people will be off topic, and won't care enough about their studies.
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, in Saudi Arabia, Rowad Alkhaleeg School for girls showed a greater educational performance than any mixed
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in the area.
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, individuals believe that mixed
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improve social skills for
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and assist
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act appropriately around the opposite sex.
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, they believe separate
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limit that.
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, it is an essential skill for society.
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, boys who finished their studies at co-educational
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offered more help to ladies and acted more politely towards them.
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, I believe separate
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help
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eliminate unbeneficial topics and focus on their education more.
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, mixed
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assist
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in developing greater social skills, which benefit our society and aim to
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developed
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visions.

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For task response, make your main opinion even more clear in the body, not only in the start and end.
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For task response, explain why separate schools help study in a deeper way. Your idea is clear, but it needs more support.
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For task response, your examples are helpful, but they feel a bit general. Use more exact and more direct examples.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, your essay has a clear 4-part shape: start, two body parts, and end. This is good.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, some links are not smooth. Try to connect ideas with simple words like because, so, while, and as a result.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, a few sentences are not fully clear, such as 'lock in to their education' and 'aim to further developed visions'. Use more natural and simple wording.
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You answered both views and gave your own opinion. This matches the task well.
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are both present and clear.
coherence and cohesion
Each body paragraph has one main idea, so the essay is easy to follow.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • co-education
  • gender segregation
  • peer pressure
  • academic performance
  • gender stereotypes
  • discrimination
  • social skills
  • teamwork
  • collaboration
  • diversity
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