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The diagram below shows the process of making violin by hand

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The process illustrates how hand-made violins are produced.
Overall
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, it starts with
the
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cutting wood into
required
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the required
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 pieces, after which
separated
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it is separated
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 into 2 parts. The
violin
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fulfills
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is equipped
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 with crucial and additional tools, before being ready to perform.
Initially
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, the wood is
cutted
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cut
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 with the
assist
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assistance
 of
to
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a machine to
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 give it a shape.
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, it
distinguished
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was distinguished
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 into 2 parts: back and front. After curving
f-hole
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the f-hole
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 to the front part,
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a
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bass bar
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also
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was also
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 added to give it more rhythm. Following that, the shaped rib is
connects
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connected
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 with
heating
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a heating
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 tool,
while
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unshaped
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the unshaped
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 rib strips are
clued
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clamped
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 to
at
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the bottom of the wood. In the next phase, both parts are
clued
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linked
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 to each other. As the ribs
clued
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curved
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, the scroll is combined with the body of
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violin
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the violin
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. Before completing the
violin
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, it
filled
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was filled
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 with all the additional tools
such
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 as
vamish
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varnish
 and neck.
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, the
violin
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 is ready to perform.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words violin with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • luthier
  • artisanal
  • acoustical properties
  • seasoning (of wood)
  • carving
  • meticulous
  • sculpting
  • varnish
  • durability
  • signature (in the context of uniqueness)
  • assembly
  • optimization
  • craftsmanship
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