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In many countries, people think owning a home is more important than renting one. Why is this the case? Do you think it’s a positive or negative situation?

Nowadays, it is often argued that
people
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 think owning a
house
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 is more important than renting
one
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.
while
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 some
people
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bilive
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believe
 that renting hose it same to own
one
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,
other
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others
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 are
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totally
 against it. In my opinion, I strongly agree that owning 
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house
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A house
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 is more important than renting
one
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.
This
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 essay will show the reasons for my opinion.
One
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 of the main reasons why
i
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I
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 strongly agree with owning
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house
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a house
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 is more important that renting
one
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 is taht if you have
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your
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house
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house,
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 you feel stability.
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 is because when you have your own
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house
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house,
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 no
one
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 can
told
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 you
obout
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about
 the pills and
trush
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trust
.
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, if someone
live
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lives
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 in his own
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house
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house,
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 he can but the trush in his yard or
wherver
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wherever
 he
want
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. Another reason why
i
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I
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 firmly
bilive
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believe
 that pwning
house
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 is better than renting
one
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 is that
people
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 can do whatever they want. A good example of
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 is if you have a party and it is so annoying no
one
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 gonna till you to stop the party because it is
youre
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your
 own
house
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.
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 some
people
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 may argue that rentint
house
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 is more important than owning
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, I
bilive
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believe
 that oening
house
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 is more important than renting
one
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Those
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. Those
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 who
told
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hold
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this
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 view argue that renting
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house
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a house
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more
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is more
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 important than owning
one
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.
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However
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this
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 argument is not
entrley
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entirely
 valid because owning
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house
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a house
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 is the
impornat
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important
 thing in stability In conclusion,
people
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 think that owning hose is more important than renting
one
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.
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Thus
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Thus,
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 it is recommended that
to
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you
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 own your
house
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task response
Answer both parts more clearly: say why people want to own a home, and say if this is good or bad.
task response
Your main idea is clear, but it needs more full support. Explain each reason more.
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Use better examples. Your examples should be real, clear, and close to the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a basic structure: intro, body, and end. This is good.
coherence and cohesion
Put one main idea in each body paragraph. This will make your writing easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like first, also, however, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Some ideas do not connect well to the question. Stay close to the topic in every sentence.
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You gave a clear opinion from the start.
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You wrote about both owning and renting, so you tried to cover the full question.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You used simple linking words like one of the main reasons, another reason, while, and in conclusion.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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