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Your friend wants to send her/his children to your house for the weekend. Write a letter to him/her and say *Agree to this arrangement. *Say what time is suitable for you. *Describe what you are planning to do.

Dear Karen, I hope
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 letter finds you well. I am writing
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 letter to inform you that I am ready to take care of your
children
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 during the weekend. I read in your previous letter that you had an emergency in your family, and because of
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that,
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 it is unsafe for you to travel with
children
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. I am ready to help you out. You can leave your
children
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 at any time on the weekend. Most probably on weekends, I am at home. It would be great if you
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 your
children
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on
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off on
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 Friday evenings or
in the
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 Saturday morning. I already started to decorate my house with colourful paintings, balloons and
with
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toys. I am planning to spend my whole weekend with your child. I love the innocent nature of both kids. And I am planning to take them to the parks, shopping malls and in the backyard to create more fun for them.
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 the backyard, we made a small swimming pool and park,
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where we
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 could spend some
over there
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. It would pleasure for me if I could give some great memories to your
children
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. I would like to know,
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 there dietery requirement for kids? Are they allergic to any food or drink? It would be great if you
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 me some spare clothes of kids, and I would really love to accompany
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your
children
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. I am looking forward to hearing
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 you soon! Warm wishes, Zia

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task response
Task response: You answered all parts of the task, but add a more clear time, like 'Please bring them at 6 pm on Friday.'
task response
Task response: Keep the tone warm and natural. Some lines sound too formal, like 'I am writing this letter to inform you.' Use simple friendly words.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your ideas are in a good order, but some sentences are long and not easy to follow. Make them shorter.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Use linking words like 'also', 'then', and 'because' to join ideas more clearly.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Keep one main idea in each paragraph. This will make the letter easier to read.
task response
Task response: You agreed clearly and you said what you plan to do with the children.
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Task response: You also asked about food and clothes, which shows care and fits the task well.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The greeting and closing are both good for a friendly letter.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • I am happy to have your children stay with us.
  • This arrangement is fine with me.
  • Saturday morning is the best time for us.
  • Please bring them to our house at around 10 a.m.
  • I am planning to take them to the park.
  • We can play games and watch a film at home.
  • I will make simple food for dinner.
  • They will have a fun and safe weekend.
  • Please send their clothes and any medicine they need.
  • I look forward to seeing them soon.
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