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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line grap illustrate the correlation between
age
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and
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and the incidence of
crime
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,
while
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 the pie chart provides information on the distribution of different
crime
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 types in the UK over the previous year.
Overall
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,
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 number of crimes
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 significantly with
age
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, with the peak being witnessed at
age
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 20.
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,
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violent
crime
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 accounts for the highest figure among the four categories shown in the pie chart. Regarding the line graph, the number of crimes is insignificant for those under the
age
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 of 12.
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, a dramatic surge can be observed from
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 point, reaching a peak of 80, 000 incidences at
age
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 20. The figure at
this
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 peak was exactly four times as much as that of
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 28, with respective
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 being 80,000 and 20,000.
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, the
crime
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 rate experienced a sharp decline, and the statistics for ages 32 and 44 were notably lower, at approximately 18,000 and 10,000 , respectively. After that,
this
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 total declines gradually and stabilises at around 7,000 cases until the
age
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 of 60. In terms of the pie chart, violent
crime
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 made up the largest share at 46 %,
whereas
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 public order
crime
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 was less than a quarter of
this
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, at only 9 %.
Moreover
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, the figures for property
crime
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 and drug
crime
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 were roughly balanced, at 23% and 22% respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, crime with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph depicts
  • The pie chart illustrates
  • reveals
  • displays
  • depicts
  • the trend of
  • the overall crime rate
  • steadily decreased
  • the distribution of
  • different types of crime
  • prevalent
  • accounts for
  • the most common crime
  • followed by
  • make up
  • a smaller proportion of
  • the total crimes
  • a smaller percentage
  • approximately
  • the remaining percentage
  • It is important to note that
  • reflects
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