The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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information about the
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and types of
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in the
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Uk
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UK
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for the
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year
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.
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, we can see that, with
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the line
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graph
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, information is given
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from 12 to 28
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years,
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playing
role the proportion
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the role of
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the highest
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proportion.
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,
pie
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the pie
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chart illustrates
violent
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that violent
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crime
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accounted near a half of the
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apply
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crime
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in
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UK
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the UK
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. Regarding
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the relationship between 8 and 20
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stood at 0% to 80%, especially, it rose significantly and reached a peak 80% in 20
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age
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years old
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. After that, it has the trend considerble plummet with 8% from 20
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age
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years
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to 60
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age
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years
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,
which
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as
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the
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crime rate percentage goes
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crime
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rate go down
quick
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quickly
in
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UK
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the UK
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at
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the
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year
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. In
term
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terms
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of
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the number of violent
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accounted 46%, the propotion of achieve highest in
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terms of crime types
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crime
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in the
UK
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,
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last
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year
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.
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, the data on
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property
crime
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accounted for 23% and the figure on drug
crime
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with 22%. By constast, the amount of public order
crime
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with 9% in types of in the
UK
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for the
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year
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, crime, uk, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph depicts
  • The pie chart illustrates
  • reveals
  • displays
  • depicts
  • the trend of
  • the overall crime rate
  • steadily decreased
  • the distribution of
  • different types of crime
  • prevalent
  • accounts for
  • the most common crime
  • followed by
  • make up
  • a smaller proportion of
  • the total crimes
  • a smaller percentage
  • approximately
  • the remaining percentage
  • It is important to note that
  • reflects
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