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Band 6.5

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The presented mix of line graph and pie chart
give
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gives
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 information about the
age
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 and types of
crime
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 in the
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Uk
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UK
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 for the
last
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year
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.
Overall
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, we can see that, with
line
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the line
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 graph
give information
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, information is given
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 from 12 to 28
ages
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years,
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 playing
role the proportion
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the role of
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 the highest
.
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proportion.
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Furthermore
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,
pie
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the pie
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 chart illustrates
violent
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that violent
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crime
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 accounted near a half of the
percentage of
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apply
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crime
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 in
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UK
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the UK
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. Regarding
,
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apply
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 the relationship between 8 and 20
age
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 stood at 0% to 80%, especially, it rose significantly and reached a peak 80% in 20
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age
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years old
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. After that, it has the trend considerble plummet with 8% from 20
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age
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years
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 to 60
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age
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years
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,
which
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as
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 the
percentage
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crime rate percentage goes
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crime
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 rate go down
quick
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quickly
 in
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UK
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the UK
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at
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over
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 the
last
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year
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. In
term
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terms
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 of
,
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 the number of violent
crime
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 accounted 46%, the propotion of achieve highest in
types of
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terms of crime types
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crime
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 in the
UK
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,
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apply
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last
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year
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.
Besides
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, the data on
porperty
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property
crime
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 accounted for 23% and the figure on drug
crime
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 with 22%. By constast, the amount of public order
crime
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 with 9% in types of in the
UK
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 for the
last
Linking Words
year
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, crime, uk, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph depicts
  • The pie chart illustrates
  • reveals
  • displays
  • depicts
  • the trend of
  • the overall crime rate
  • steadily decreased
  • the distribution of
  • different types of crime
  • prevalent
  • accounts for
  • the most common crime
  • followed by
  • make up
  • a smaller proportion of
  • the total crimes
  • a smaller percentage
  • approximately
  • the remaining percentage
  • It is important to note that
  • reflects
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