The diagram below shows the process of yogurt making. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram demonstrates how to produce a
yogurt
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on
a industry
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an industrial
scale. Generally speaking, the process involves seven steps, beginning with cooking the milk until delivering the product to the customers. Taking a closer look
on
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the image, the manufacturing
begin
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begins
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when milk in a
huge-pot
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huge pot
is cooked at 90 degree celcius, which is
mesuared
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measured
by utilising
food
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thermometer, and it
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last
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lasts
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for 30 minutes, or more time in order to obtain a thicker
yogurt
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. Once it
set
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,
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, it is then
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then
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, it is cooled down in the same chamber until the temperature reduce at 44C. After that,
a
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live bacteria
is
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are
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added into the skim,
before
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and
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then
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,
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it is left there until it
reach 37C
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reaches 37 °C
or around 4 hours
long
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. After that process
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, the pot is brought into a refrigerator to be cooled and stored.
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sugar and strawberry are put into the mixed product to boost its flavour. Eventually, the finished
yogurt
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is poured into some glasses and packaged
,
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after that
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, they
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they are
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it is
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delivered to the buyers via a truck.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pasteurized
  • Lactobacillus
  • Streptococcus
  • Fermentation
  • Lactic Acid
  • Acidification
  • Incubation
  • Flavoring agents
  • Cooling
  • Packaging
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