IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4.5

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extend do you agrer or disagree with this statemnet? Zhazira.

In
tomorrows worlds
Check wording
tomorrow's
show examples
 world
people
Punctuation problem
, people
show examples
 will let go of traditional
media
Use synonyms
Linking Words
such
Punctuation problem
, such
show examples
books
Change preposition
as books
show examples
 and newspapers
to
Punctuation problem
, to
show examples
 a more digital age technology
and
Punctuation problem
, and
show examples
this
Linking Words
 change will make
access
Use synonyms
 to
this
Linking Words
 information free
, i
Correct word order
. I,
show examples
 as someone who consumes both type neither agree
and or
Correct word choice
nor
show examples
 disagree with
this
Linking Words
 statement. The growth of technology in all aspects has made
access
Use synonyms
 to
media
Use synonyms
such
Linking Words
 as books and
news
Use synonyms
 a lot easier and faster than the old days of old,
this
Linking Words
 on itself is a good thing cause in todays world money is
time
Use synonyms
 and the faster you can have
access
Use synonyms
 the easier and cheaper it is than to go wait for certian things
such
Linking Words
 as
news
Use synonyms
 since printing newspapers take
time
Use synonyms
 and is limited to only the morning times and
also
Linking Words
 if a new event happens at best you need to wait a full day cycle till it reaches the
news
Use synonyms
 room and to get printed, that wasted
time
Use synonyms
 might be a bad thing since if the
news
Use synonyms
 is important
such
Linking Words
 as economic crisises that can lead to not having enough
time
Use synonyms
 to prepare for what is to come.
and
Fix capitalization
And
show examples
 if
its
Use the right word
it's
show examples
 a book that you are waiting to read of any type, the
time
Use synonyms
 waiting can be frustraring and or there is always a chance that it will never arrive at your region of the world
which
Punctuation problem
, which
show examples
 will cause more sadness.
so
Fix capitalization
So
show examples
 the traditional form of
media
Use synonyms
 has limitations
and
Punctuation problem
, and
show examples
 because it is a physical
form
Punctuation problem
form,
show examples
 it will cost money to
access
Use synonyms
 and to make.
On the other hand
Linking Words
 digital
media
Use synonyms
 costs a fraction of what old timey sources of information costs, it can be very easily updated and uploaded and
this
Linking Words
 will lead to a very fast life span, meaning that for something like the
news
Use synonyms
, the second an event happens it can be told about and can be shared with everyone without any limitations of where they are and with nowadays everyone having a smart phone they can
access
Use synonyms
 it without a second thought. but
on the other hand
Linking Words
 there will always be people that are big fans of traditional meida either for collecting and or just expriancing how they are and how they work and that can always lead to a large group of people keeping
this
Linking Words
 alive as an art form, so in conclution of it all i believe with the growth of tech it will lead to older forms of
media
Use synonyms
such
Linking Words
 as books to be less visible but i am at the understanding that it will never go away.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task response
Give a clear answer in the first paragraph. Do not say both agree and disagree in an unclear way. Say exactly how far you agree.
coherence and cohesion
Write one main idea in each body paragraph and explain it step by step.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words like first, also, however, and in conclusion.
task response
Add one or two clear examples to support each main point.
coherence and cohesion
Keep your ideas on the same topic in one paragraph. Do not jump from books to news and back too much.
task response
Check the question words carefully. You need to answer both: will people stop buying print, and will online reading be free.
task response
You answer the topic all the way through the essay.
coherence and cohesion
There is an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
task response
You give some reasons about speed, access, and cost.
coherence and cohesion
You use some linking words like on the other hand and so.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »- a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: