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The chart below shows the chnages in three different areas of crime in Manchester city centre from 2003-20012.

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THe
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 supplied line graph illustrates the modifications in 3 distinct categories- burglary, robbery,
car
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and car
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 theft in Manchester city centre within a time span of various years.
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, it is crystal clear that the burglary experienced a significant downward trend,
while
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 the indication of car theft underwent a slight increase
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 the exception of robbery
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, which
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 remained more or less the same. The most prevalent felony was the burglary in the initial year, but in the ultimate
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period,
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replaced position with car theft
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car theft replaced burglary
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