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Band 3.5

The chart below shows the chnages in three different areas of crime in Manchester city centre from 2003-20012.

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obviously
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Obviously
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, violence in
burglary
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the burglary
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 field
were
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was
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 decreased,
while
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 the car theft violence
were
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was
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 slightly increased over the entire period, with the exception of robbery. The most
seemable
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common
 violence was burglary in inital stage,
however
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,
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the criminal case of Car theft was slightly increased,
otherwise
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 robbery remains stable through the years

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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