Some people believe that traditional games can better develop children’s capabilities than modern games do. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Answer the question more clearly. Say if you agree, disagree, or partly agree from the start, and keep this same idea all through the essay.

coherence and cohesion

Write both main body parts in a more direct way. Each part should have one clear main idea, then a short reason, then one example.

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Explain your ideas more. Some points are too short or not easy to follow, so the reader cannot fully see how games help children.

coherence and cohesion

Use simple linking words well, like first, also, for example, as a result, and in conclusion. This will make the essay easier to follow.

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Make your examples more exact and closer to the topic of children’s capabilities, such as team work, health, problem solving, or social skills.

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You answered the topic and talked about both traditional games and modern games.

coherence and cohesion

Your essay has a clear basic shape: introduction, two body parts, and a short ending.

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You used examples like football and home-building games to support your ideas.

Fully explain your ideas

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Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

190 words

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