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Nowadays people waste a lot of food that was bought from shops and restaurants. Why do you think people waste food? What can be done to reduce the amount of food they throw away?

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people
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 are not saving the rest of their
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is way
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restaurants
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to solve
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people
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to waste
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your
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food
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fridge
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food
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people
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people
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did people
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bought
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buy
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 too much
food
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hungry
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imagine
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 and you keep buying and
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ordering
 more in the restaurant. Inaddition when they have
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a large
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 amount of money.
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comcunity
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community
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people
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 who are
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concerned
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furniture
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sell
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old things and give
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 to the homeless.
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everyone
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 the future. From my
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 the parents have a huge impact on their kid and how to build
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their
 personalities , by sharing and caring for other
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 if they
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 or hopeless.

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task response
Answer both parts more clearly: why people waste food, and what can reduce it.
coherence and cohesion
Use one clear main idea in each body paragraph.
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Give direct examples about food waste, not other waste like clothes or furniture.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words well, like first, also, for example, and in conclusion.
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Explain each point more. Do not only name an idea; say how and why it helps.
coherence and cohesion
Keep your ideas focused. Some parts move away from the main topic.
coherence and cohesion
You wrote an introduction and a conclusion.
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You tried to discuss both causes and solutions.
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You used an example about public fridges to help poor people.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has clear paragraph breaks.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • waste food
  • throw away
  • go bad
  • meal plan
  • shopping list
  • special offer
  • large pack
  • left-over food
  • date label
  • portion size
  • take food home
  • store food
  • freeze food
  • use up food
  • safe to eat
  • busy life
  • save money
  • eat out
  • order take-away
  • reduce waste
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