Your sister has asked you to organize the music for her wedding at the end of next month. Write a letter to your friend who is an amateur musician. In your letter ● ask your friend to perform at the wedding ● describe why he/she would be suitable for this event ● explain how your friend will be compensated if they agree. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ___________,

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Dear Harsh, I hope you are doing well. I
am
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want to ask you
that are
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if
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you
available
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are available
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to perform your guitar
bollywood
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Bollywood
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music mash-up program
in
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next month. I want to give you
a
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good news that my cousin sister, Devyani, is getting married on May 27,2026. She wanted to arrange the musical event in one of her marriage functions. I want to know
that are
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if
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you
performing
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are performing
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anywhere else on
this
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day. My sister is
big
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a big
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fan of Bollywood music
songs
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and
love
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the instrumental
songs
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on guitar. As you are playing both instrumental and vocal
songs
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, I think you are the perfect musician for the event. On top of that
Devyani
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, Devyani
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likes your latest video song in which you played guitar. My sister wants to listen
your
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to
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some sample
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on Bollywood
songs
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. If she likes and you are available on event day, she will pay
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at least
fifty thousand Indian
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rupees
for sure. I am waiting for your reply. Warm Regards, Jay

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Answer all three parts in a more clear way.
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Use a more natural friendly tone in some lines.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like and, so, because.
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Keep one main point in each paragraph.
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You asked your friend to play at the wedding clearly.
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You gave good reasons why your friend is right for this event.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear opening and ending.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas are in a good order from start to end.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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