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Writing Samples
Band 3

Some people consider national news as more important while other people think that international news is of more importance. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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National
news
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 is more important for some people, and so is international
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. Half of the people who say that national
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 is important focus more on what is happening around them,
while
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 people who believe the other opinion focus more on what is happening outside and how it will affect them. I do believe that both
news
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 are important in their own aspects.
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, with national
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, we can understand what is happening around us and what we can do about it. Meanwhile, we can understand more about the world with international
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. Because sometimes, both
news
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 are linked to each other.

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task response
Write more to fully answer all parts of the task. You need to discuss both views in a clear way and then give your own opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Add one full paragraph for each view. This will make your ideas easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear topic sentences, like 'Some people think national news is more important because...'
task response
Support each main point with a simple example. For example, national news can help people know about school, jobs, or safety in their area.
coherence and cohesion
Write a short ending that repeats your opinion in a clear way.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words such as 'on the one hand', 'on the other hand', 'for example', and 'in my opinion'.
task response
Your opinion is clear: you think both kinds of news are important.
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You stay on the topic and do not write about unrelated ideas.
coherence and cohesion
There is some basic connection between ideas, such as 'for instance' and 'meanwhile'.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • national
  • international
  • important
  • understand
  • local
  • community
  • affects
  • connected
  • global
  • politics
  • culture
  • economics
  • relevant
  • influence
  • empathy
  • broader
  • worldview
  • issues
  • events
  • citizens
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