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The chart below shows the average cost of a monthly contract for 4 different mobiles in a European country from January to September 2002, measured in euro.

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The chart illustrates the average
cost
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 of a monthly contract for 4 different mobile categories in a specific European country between January and
September
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 2002, units are measured in
euros
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 Sim TX mobiles and Lex prices increased, despite Domo slightly
decreased
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,
whereas
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 Alpha fluctuated a little bit throughout the period. Sim TX mobiles at the beginning of the period
cost
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 5
euros
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,
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however
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,
it
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they
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 dramatically increased in July to reach 25
euros
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 , which is the highest by
September
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. Lex company salling costs approximately 13
euros
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 in Januery which fluctuated until June and
then
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 grew steadily to around 18
euros
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. Regarding Alpha, the only mobile company that fluctuated during the whole period and
cost
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 under 10
euros
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 in both January and
September
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.
Furthermore
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, the remaining company Domo was the most expensive with the price of 15
euros
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 in January
,despite
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. Despite
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 the decrease in April, the
cost
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 slightly increased to reach 20
euros
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 in May,
then
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 remained relatively stable until June and increased again to 25
euros
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 in July and fell back to under 25
euros
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 in
September
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cost, september, euros with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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