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The graph below shows the number of films produced by five countries in three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart illustrates the
figure
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number
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 of
films
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 that were produced by five nations from 2007 to 2009.
Overall
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, A had the largest
number
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 of
films
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 during the three years. C, D and E were not strong at film industry
that
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, as
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 none of them had over 20
films
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 a
year
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.
Initially
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, A and B remained stable in the
number
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 of
films
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 a
year
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 in 2007 and 2008, which were near 90 and near 50 a
year
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, respectively.
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,
this
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 situation
had change
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changed
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 in 2009 in different ways. A had a slight decline to only 80
films
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 a
year
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, but B had a significant surge to 70
movies
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 a
year
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,
thought
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though
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 A still won in the
number
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.
Although
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 C, D and E
were
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apply
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all had smaller figure compare to A and B, they had different changes. C had
steady
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steadily
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 risen from less than 10
movies
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 a
year
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 to
near
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nearly
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 20
movies
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 a
year
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 from 2007 to 2009. D had a slight decrease in figure from 17 to 10 between 2007 and 2008, but
increase
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an increase
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 to 15 in 2009. E remained stable
in
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at
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 the
number
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 of 10
movies
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 a
year
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 in
this
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 period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words films, number, year, movies with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Film production
  • Trends
  • Consistently
  • Significant
  • Comparisons
  • Patterns
  • Increased/Decreased
  • Analyzed
  • Anomalies
  • Industry changes
  • Economic factors
  • Cultural aspects
  • Collectively
  • Overall trend
  • Reported
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