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Scientists predict that m cars will be driven by coputers, not people in the near future. Why? Do you thnk it is a positive or negative development?i

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It is considered that technology has been integrated
rapidely
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rapidly
 in our lives. Automations and artificial intelligence are essential parts in
variuos
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various
 industries
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, and
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 one of these industries is
cars
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 market. Scientists argue that
cars
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 will be driven by computers, not people
in
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, in
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 the near future. I firmly agree with
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 prediction
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moreover
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, moreover
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 reciently, we started to see these kinds of
cars
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in
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on
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 the roads. In my opinion,
i
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I
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 find these
vehichles
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vehicles
 have a lot of advantages and will
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bring
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 significant benefits
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this
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 trade.
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,
use
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 of automated
cars
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 have crucial effect on the environment, as the use of
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 battery
instead
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 of fuel will decrease the pollution that
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results
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 from burning
the
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fuel. Another important benefit
,
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 is that
instulation
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installation
 of computer systems
on
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in
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cars
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 will lead to huge
instments
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improvements
 in
cars
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 tradings.
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Cars industrial
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 countries might start to export automated
cars
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 to other countries
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, which
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 will lead to huge rewards
on
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for
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 their economy.
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,
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despite
 the numerous
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benefits that we could gain from
cars
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 that are driven by computers, we might still face some drawbacks. The high price of these
cars
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 is one of the disadvantages that might decrease their
selling
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sales
.
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, computed
vehiches
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vehicles
 are complicated and not friendly to drive,
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 to their maintenance . These
cars
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 require specific
trainning
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training
 courses for the
intreasted
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interested
 customers. so they can drive them
easly
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easily
 and deal with any
maintenacne
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maintenance
 issues. From my perspective, I find
computerized
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cars
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 considered to be
advanced
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an advanced
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 transformation in
cars
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 markets
,
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however
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, specific requirements need to be considered to
assure
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ensure
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 providing safety and quality to the clients.

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Answer both parts more clearly: why this may happen, and why you think it is good or bad.
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Give one clear main idea in each body paragraph, then explain it with a simple example.
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Your position is mostly positive, but the essay also gives many bad points. Make your final opinion more clear all through the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer linking words like First, Also, However, and In conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Some ideas do not connect well. Check each sentence and ask: does this support the main point of the paragraph?
coherence and cohesion
Use full stops well. Some long sentences should be split into two shorter ones.
coherence and cohesion
You have an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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You discuss both good and bad sides of computer-driven cars.
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You give some examples, like pollution and price.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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