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The line graph illustrates the number of shops that closed and opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
Overall
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, the closure at the beginning of the duration showed a light fluctuation,
while
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 the
openings
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 decreased over the period
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 Over the following years, the decrase of
openings
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 grew steadily,
whereas
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 closures dramatically decreased. After that. It grew again and remained stable to the end of the period
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Openings
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 declined gradually to the end of the period. In 2011, the
openings
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 declined from 9,000 to 4,000 shops over one year
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 After that , it climbed up gradually to reach 6,000 shops in the year of 2014.
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, it fell to 4,000
stores
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 in 2015
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 Between the year 2016 and 2017, it remained stable at 4,000
stores
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Till 2018, it sharply decreased to 3,000
stores
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. The closures fluctuated between the years 2011 and 2014, starting with 6,500 and ending with 6,700
stores
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. In 2014, the closures fell to 500
stores
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.
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, it remained stable from 2016 to 2018 with 5,000
stores
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words openings, stores with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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