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There is an increasing trend around the world of married couples deciding not to have children. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for couples who decide to do this.

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The number of married couples without
children
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 been increasing in recent times. There are many benefits,
as well as
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 downsides
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this
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 trend. When having
children
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, it is a given that a lot of your time and effort will be spent on looking after them. Particularly in the early stages, a lot of sacrifices will have to be made with your career and other aspects of life. Many people might not be willing to give that up, as not having kids would enable them to be fully committed to their work. It
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 costs a lot of money to take care of your offspring, which the couple may be considering investing
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 something they consider more important. If you
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 an
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individual,
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 are
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 unsure of whether you can give the child the attention he/she deserves,
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 it is safer for you and the child if you decide not to have any in the first place. Equally, there are many disadvantages to not having
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 too. Modern society has been built with the help of strong communities
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 these would cease to exist if everyone decided to stop building their families. Families with rich histories and important contributions to our lives, that have been around for
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 would disappear. There would be nobody left to carry on their legacy. Having grandchildren is one of the biggest joys in life
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 my opinion, and deciding not
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 any
children
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 would take away that gift from your parents. In conclusion, raising
children
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 is not something that may be suitable for all partners. It is a decision that comes with huge risks, and one that should be made only after careful consideration.

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Answer both sides in a more full way. Your essay gives good points, but some ideas are short.
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Add one clear example for the good side and one for the bad side.
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Make your position more clear in the end. Say if the good points are stronger, the bad points are stronger, or if both are equal.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words a bit more carefully. Some parts move fast from one idea to the next.
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Build each main point with a simple pattern: main idea, reason, example, result.
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Keep the focus on couples. A few ideas move to society and parents more than the couple.
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You have a clear intro, two body parts, and a conclusion.
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Your ideas are easy to follow in most parts.
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You discuss both advantages and disadvantages, so you answer the task.
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Some points are relevant, like time, work, money, and duty.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • childfree
  • personal freedom
  • financial stress
  • raising children
  • nurturing the relationship
  • societal pressure
  • stigma
  • support network
  • companionship
  • legacy
  • regret
  • intimate bond
  • norm
  • invest in experiences
  • close-knit
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